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The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers into seven different countries in 2004

The chart below gives information about the average annual pay of doctors and other workers into seven different countries in 2004
The Bart consists of information about the average annual income of medical practitioners and other gangs in seven distinct countries in 2004.
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 Doctors' annual wages were highest among the countries crowd' pay was lower. Looking first at the beginning body, From France in other gangs annual payment was 25 and health care providers' wages were 80 and
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 In Italy additional employees' wage was consistently attracted the lowest number 20 and to coming to general practitioners the gap becomes noticeable they were slightly lower than the previous country.
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 in the Czech Republic additional aggregation stipends were decreased to 15 and other options steps were increased to 40. In Germany doctor's remuneration was increased making up roughly 61 and other teams' job payment was slightly higher than the former 20 Starting from the country of Finland the other worker's payment was the same disparity persists in the number of wages 20 and the healthcare assemblage's income was equal to 55 And about Switzerland another band' salary was 40 and doctors' salary was equal to 65 and in The US other team' emolument increased by 43 per cent, and these are the doctors who received the highest number of stipend was 120 and the two steppes have a different monthly fee.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "likewise".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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