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The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the populations of both Australia and Malaysia in the years 1980 and 2002.
Overall
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, the maximum and minimum total
population
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 have been seen in Malaysia. Australia has recorded the lowest average annual
population
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 growth ,
whereas
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 the highest female
population
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 has been recorded. In Australia, in the
year
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 2002, the whole
population
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 had peaked with 19.6
million
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 in comparison to the
year
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 1980 with 14.7
million
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. The female
population
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 had the highest 50.1% in both 2002 and 1980.
While
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, male
population
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 was close to the female
population
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 , with 49.9% of Australians. There was the lowest average of yearly
population
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 growth with 1.2% in 1980 and 1.3% in 2002. In Malaysia, in the
year
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 2002, the total
population
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 was the highest , with 24.3
million
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 in comparison to the
year
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 1980, with 13.7
million
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.
Although
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, male
population
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 had the highest 50.6% and 50.3% in the
year
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 2002 and 1980, respectively. The female
population
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 was nearly 49.4% and 49.7% in the years 2002 and 1980, respectively.
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, they had recorded the lowest rate of average annual
population
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 growth with 2.1% in the
year
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 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population
  • growth
  • increase
  • larger
  • smaller
  • area
  • million
  • year
  • comparison
  • features
  • rate
  • significantly
  • higher
  • density
  • around
  • approximately
  • period
  • higher
  • lower
  • information
  • reporting
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