The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the number of adults in thousands who have participated in several major
sports
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.
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,
this
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essay will examine the main features and will make comparisons where relevant.
According to
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the chart, Tennis, Football
and
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, and
show examples
Rugby
are
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apply
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seem
the
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to be the
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most popular
sports
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in the period of 1997 and 2017.
Furthermore
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, people who played Tennis in 1997 have indicated a number of 50000
participant
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participants
show examples
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while
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, while
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in 2017 the average has increased to more than 55000. Moving
next,
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Football with a rate of 31000 in 1997 and a sudden jump in 2017 with an average of 49000. 
Following
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this
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with
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, with
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the least in rank
which
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, which
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are Basketball and Cricket, they
also
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indicates
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indicate
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a decreased rate of adults.
To sum up
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,
although
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people enjoyed all
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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seven
sports
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. Tennis, Football and Rugby have maintained their positions throughout that time.
However
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, Golf and swimming were
also
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followed in second place
but
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, but
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other
sports
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were
on
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at
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the bottom list with a decent number of adults.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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