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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes.Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

In today`s contemporary era,
people
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 are wearing various
types
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 of
clothes
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. Some
people
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 say it is easy to identify a
person
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 and
his
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their
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charater
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character
 by their
clothes
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,
while
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 other argues that it is not possible. In my opinion,
i am
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I
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 agree with the statement
,
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apply
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 that we can identify
people
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 and
his
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their
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 culture from their selection of
clothes
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.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 are wearing so many
types
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 of
clothes
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 in different regions and nations.
Due to
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this
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, many countries and states
having
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have
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 various
food
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,
clothes
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 and
tradition
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traditions
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according to
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thier haitage
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their heritage
 and culture, and
clothes
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 are
changes
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changed
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 by climate conditions
also
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.
Furthermore
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,
so
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apply
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it is easy to identify
about
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apply
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a
person
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`s
choice
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 when we see their
choice
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 of
clothes
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 and
food
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 sometimes.
For instance
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, research
was done
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apply
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by
the
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apply
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Western Sydney University says,
encient
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ancient
people
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 developed
clothes
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 according
the
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to the
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 climate of their area or nations, so
in
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apply
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worldwide
people
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 have
varios
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various
types
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 of
clothes
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.
Secondly
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, some cities have various
kind
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kinds
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 of
people
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are
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apply
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living, where
this
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 kind of
clothes
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 helps to identify the character and background of a
person
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.
some
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Some
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 large cities like
the
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London, where so many
people
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 are living, so everyone
identifty
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identifies
 the behaviour of a
person
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 from their style of fashion. Some other
thing
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things
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aslo
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also
 helpful
along with
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clothes
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is
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are
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 their
choice
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 of foods, so
people
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 can identify
thier
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their
 country or region by their selection of
food
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.
For example
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,
in
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to
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 my best of
knowledge
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my knowledge
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, there was
a
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an
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 article in
a
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the
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 Times of India
says
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that says
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,
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apply
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mega city
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megacities
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 have various
type
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types
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 of
the
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apply
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population
over
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in
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 the world, so
there
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their
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peoples
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people
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are
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apply
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identifty eachother
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identify each other
 by
thier
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their
 style of clothing.
To conclude
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, it is possible to know about a
person
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 and
his
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their
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 character, by their
clothes
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 and by their
choice
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 of
food
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because
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, because
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 every nation and province
have
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has
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 various
types
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 of dishes and
fasion
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fashion
.

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Try to make clear points and support them with good examples. This helps readers understand your ideas.
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Use linking words to connect your ideas. This improves the flow of your essay.
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You have a clear opinion and stick to it throughout the essay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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