You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter, • tell your friend about the party • ask for the recipe • explain why you need the recipe from his/her country

Dear Neha, I'm happy to announce that my birthday
party
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is coming soon. The
party
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is scheduled for
18th
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of July, which is Sunday, and
venue
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the venue
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is
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has
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already
decided
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been decided
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for it. If you remember, in the centre of our city, there was a large banquet hall, which I thought to book,
also
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it has a capacity to accommodate
for
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almost 50 to 70 guests for a
party
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. Even though the
menue
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menu
consists of a wide variety of foods and cocktails but I'm really interested in the
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recpie
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recipe
of a mac cheese burger, which I enjoyed during my
last
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visit to your country . As far as I
remember
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remember,
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it was a
mexican
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Mexican
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restaurant, located near
to
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your house, where I had
this
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mouthwatering dish. The taste of the pasta with sauce and beef was exceptionally good. I really need
this
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recpie
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recipe
on an urgent basis as my birthday
party
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is approaching soon,
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I need
sometime
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some time
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to learn and experiment
it
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with it
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at home before serving it to my guests. The main reason why I want
this
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recpie
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recipe
as some of my guests are from Mexico
and
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, and
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our current
menue
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menu
doesn't have any
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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dish
especially
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, especially
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for those people who prefer
eat
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to eat
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meat. I look forward to your prompt response, and I wish I could meet you at my birthday
party
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.
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, I would be very thankful to you if you
can
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arrange a
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recpie
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recipe
for me. Regards, Amanjot Kaur

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task achievement
Make sure to check spelling and grammar. For example, 'recpie' should be 'recipe.'
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs clearly to separate different ideas. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Include a warm closing line, like 'I hope to see you soon!' to make the letter more friendly.
task achievement
You included details about the party, like the date and venue, which is great!
task achievement
You expressed your need for the recipe clearly, which helps understand your request.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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