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Scientific innovation is always a positive thing and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer.

There is no denying the fact that human
innovation
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 in general always has many advantages,especially the scientific
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.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that it is not important and
goverments
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governments
 should invest in other sectors,there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion,
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 consider that scientific
innovation
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 has
significant
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a significant
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 positive impact.
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the
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scientific
innovation
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 is playing a big role in developing many areas of life.
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, it
is contribute
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 to
make
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making
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 our life easier and
enhace
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enhancing
 it .
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,
sewing
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the sewing
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 machine
invented
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was invented
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 after
doing many
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much
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researching
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 and
followed
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following
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 the scientific
approaches
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approach
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, it is
consider
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considered
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as
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apply
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a
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the
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 father of
innovation
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.
In addition
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, in
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the medical
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 sector, it
is
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has
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 helped to
develp
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develop
 many medicines,which
assisted
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have assisted
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to
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in
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treatment
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the treatment
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people
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of people
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 and animals.And allowed
people
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 who have chronic diseases to
practice
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live
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 their lives normally. Another
poin
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point
 to
conside
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consider
,its role in factories and big companies. Many companies are investing a big part of their budget in the research and
innovation
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 sector to stay
in
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at
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 the top and develop their products.
For instance
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,
TESLA
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the TESLA
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 company has become one of the best companies in the electric cars field after focusing fifteen per
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cent
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 of its efforts
to support
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on supporting
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the research and
innovation
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 field. It is
also
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 possible to say that it is
gain
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people
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,
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who
trying
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are trying
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 to innovate, mental and logical skills. In conclusion,despite
people
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 having different views,I believe that
goverments
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governments
 and critics should
realize
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realise
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 the Scientific
innovation
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importance
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apply
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, and encourage them to continue to have a good quality of life.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly explain your main points. Some ideas need more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words to connect your ideas better.
general
Pay attention to grammar and spelling to improve clarity.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion about the importance of scientific innovation.
task achievement
The examples used, like the sewing machine and TESLA, were relevant to your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific advancement
  • progress
  • quality of life
  • technological breakthroughs
  • solutions
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • disease eradication
  • economic growth
  • job opportunities
  • curiosity
  • creativity
  • scientific exploration
  • knowledge expansion
  • negative consequences
  • ethical use
  • regulation
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