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Band 6

You recently found out that your friend has had a baby. Write a letter to congratulate her. In your letter: – congratulate her on the arrival of the baby – ask what kind of gift she would like – suggest a time to visit and catch up.

Dear Amy, I'm sorry I haven't written to you in a long time because I was completely busy with my children. I truly congratulate you on giving birth to your
baby
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, and I hope you are fine. I heard the news from Ali, our mutual friend, and I was thrilled when he told me that the
baby
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 is a girl. In my opinion , girls are so sweet
and
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, and
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 there are several types of gifts that can be given to them. By the way, what kind of gift would you like me to take for your
baby
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? clothes, toys, or any sanitary tools. If you inform me about your interest and especially the needs of
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baby
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the baby
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, you will make me happy.
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, I was thinking of coming and seeing you and your newborn at a suitable time, when you will be ready to meet anyone. I think next Wednesday
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,
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that is
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 the 15th of
July
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July,
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 could be an appropriate time. If you agree with me, please inform me in your letter. I look forward to seeing you. With love, Reihaneh Fazli

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coherence and cohesion
Start your letter with a friendly greeting to make it more personal.
coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking long sentences into shorter ones for clearer ideas.
task achievement
Make sure to ask specific questions to engage your friend more.
task achievement
Your warm congratulations set a nice tone for the letter.
coherence and cohesion
You suggested a specific time to visit, which is great for making plans.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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