Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily file is good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

Some
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say that
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in
work
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,
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or life is a good thing, but
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, we should cooperate
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. In my opinion, I
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with
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statement. On the one hand,
competition
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is a very good thing. The reason for
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is that the competitive mentality will help
people
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improve their sense of responsibility,
work
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productivity, and create high
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efficiency. Not only that,
competition
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will help increase the working,
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, and learning atmosphere of the group, helping
people
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become more productive and excited.
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, in a
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Belgium
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2023, competitive psychology contributes 17% to team success, improving
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performance.
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,
competition
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also
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has its downsides. Too much
competition
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can cause friction, disunity in society, and personal grudges.
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can
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cooperate with each other, thereby handling and solving difficulties and challenges together.
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, in the Champions League championship of
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Saint-Germain club, solidarity and cooperation accounted for 80% of the team's success. Not only that,
cooperation
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but cooperation
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can
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improve the relationship between
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in society. When
resident
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residents
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cooperate well, the relationship between the group will be increased.
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, a
study
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in Japan
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2017, successful cooperation in
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,
study
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and life accounts for 47% of good social relationships of Japanese
people
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. In conclusion, every problem
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two
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, a positive face and a negative face.
People
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need to take advantage of the good aspects and limit the negative aspects, thereby enhancing
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their
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own value.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and support it throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main point and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
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Include more specific examples to support your points.
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You provided arguments for both competition and cooperation.
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You used relevant examples to support your points.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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