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You are having a graduation party next Sunday evening. You have invited over 25 people to celebrate in your garden, which may continue late into the night. Write a letter to your elderly neighbor. In your letter: ·       Explain what will be happening ·       Offer your apologies in advance ·       Invite him to join the celebration You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Kulligowski

Dear Mr. Kulligowski, I hope
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 letter finds you in excellent health and great spirits. I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I am going to organise a party to share my happiness with my loved ones on the occasion of my graduation. The party will be held on Sunday at 5pm in my backyard
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 I have invited my relatives and friends
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in
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total
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 I am expecting 25 people
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 auspicious event. All the preparations have been done , which includes
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 of foods , drinks and music. I want to apologise in advance because you may
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loud music till late
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at night
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. I will try to finish the event around 11.30pm . I hope you don't mind because it is a proud moment for me,
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 I am feeling majestic. I want to invite you to be a part of
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 celebration , and I request
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that you
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bring your family
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 you . I am looking forward to hearing from you Yours sincerely,

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. For example, separate the invitation and apology into different paragraphs.
task achievement
Make sure to use a polite tone throughout the letter, especially in the invitation part.
positive
Your letter has a warm greeting and a friendly tone, which is very nice.
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You clearly state what the event is about and when it will take place.
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