In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

There is no denying the fact that living alone
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has become common recently.
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it is a commonly held belief that living with yourself is a good option and
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an argument that
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it is a bad way to live and it will lead to many
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, living alone will make
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relationships weaker and destroy
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,when you live
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you will not see and stay with your relatives regularly
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will affect your communication badly.
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enough to keep your relationship with them.
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a new study held in America, they found that physical contact is the best way to solve family problems because it can make people feel of others more than other methods.
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, people who live alone, always
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more independent and responsible compared to the rest, it is because they do not have anyone to help them,so they
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to depend on themselves. It is
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possible to say that they have more privacy and freedom to do what they want.
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, they can
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home late, and
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their home without taking permission from their parents. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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, I tend to believe that living and spending time with our families is extremely important to live a good life and to keep our society.

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Make sure to express your opinion more clearly in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences to help your reader understand the main point of each paragraph.
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Add more examples to support your points, so your ideas feel stronger and clearer.
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You have made a clear attempt to discuss both sides of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main point well, showing your overall belief about the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • self-reliance
  • personal development
  • sense of belonging
  • loneliness
  • isolation
  • mental health
  • financial stress
  • cultural shifts
  • social norms
  • fulfillment
  • community values
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