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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the changes in the number of
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burglary
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burglaries
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car
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theft
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thefts
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, and
robbery
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 incidents in the Newport region between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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, the three types of crimes showed distinct trends over the period.
While
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car
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theft
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 and
robbery
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 generally increased,
burglary
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 declined significantly.
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, the pace and pattern of change varied for each category. In 2003,
burglary
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 and
car
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theft
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 recorded the highest figures, at around 3,400 and 2,600 cases respectively.
Burglary
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 experienced a sharp decline over the following years, dropping to approximately 1,300 incidents by 2012.
Car
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theft
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,
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, showed fluctuations throughout the period but ultimately rose again, ending as the most common crime in 2012.
Robbery
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 was consistently the least frequent crime. It began at just over 500 incidents in 2003 and rose gradually, reaching about 1,300 by 2012. Interestingly, by the end of the period, both
burglary
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 and
robbery
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 stood at similar levels—around 1,300 to 1,500 cases.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, car, theft, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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