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Band 1

creative artists should be given the freedom to express their ideas through words, pictures, music or films. Some people, nevertheless, think that the government should restrict artists' freedom of expression. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Indeed, people of art are able to show their feelings by words, pictures, music, or film without any limits.
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 others doubt that freedom should be limited by government, I strictly agree that all people have their own
rights
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of expressing
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 themselves without any restrictions.  It goes without saying that people all over the world have
ability
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the ability
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show
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to show
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 their talent without being denied by
government
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the government
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. Despite the fact that
government
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the government
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 should protect public morality, human rights
and
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 democracy should not be prevented.
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, if officials deny people’s freedom,
this
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 situation will end up with
lack
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a lack
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 of masterpieces in their country
which
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 has detrimental consequences on democracy. Artist cannot able to convey their talent
with
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 others and their
art
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 abilities can die.
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, being able to express feelings without any restrictions is the most valuable part of people’s expression of talent.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your position and main points.
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Try to make your arguments clearer and more detailed to support your position.
coherence
Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and make the flow smoother.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it with examples.
coherence
Make sure to include a conclusion that summarizes your points clearly.
content
You expressed a strong personal opinion about freedom of expression.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom
  • expression
  • restrict
  • artists
  • creative
  • ideas
  • society
  • inspire
  • reflect
  • social
  • issues
  • discuss
  • important
  • topics
  • culture
  • diversity
  • rich
  • varied
  • rules
  • prevent
  • harm
  • offensive
  • content
  • promote
  • violence
  • protect
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