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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The provided table and pie chart represent the
police
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 budget distribution for 2017 and 2018 in a district of Britain. The former illustrates the sources of the money,
while
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 the latter shows where it was spent.
Overall
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,
incoming
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the incoming
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 budget in 2017 and 2018 did differ slightly, the same as its share among outsources. In terms of income, National Government, Local Taxes, and Other sources, from highest to
lowes
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lowest
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 in amount, were
acommodating
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accommodating
police
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. Salaries, Building and transport, and Technology were respectively holding their share in
spendings
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spending
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, in descending order. In detail, in one year, all of the sources increased their investments in
police
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: National Government from 175.5
million
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euro
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 to 177.8
million
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euro
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, Local Taxes by 11.1
million
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euro
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 from 91.2
million
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euro
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, and the other by 0.5
million
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euro
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, starting from 38
million
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euro
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. The total budget consisted of 304.7
million
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euro
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euros
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 in 2017 and 318.6
million
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euro
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euros
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 in 2018.
Sallaries
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Salaries
 for
police
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 officers and staff dropped in their share, becoming 69% from 75%.
Instead
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 of it, more money was translated into technology, with its portion in the
buget
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budget
spendings
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spending
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 increasing from 8%
by
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to
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 5%. Building and transport remained its money and stayed at 17%.

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