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With the rise of ebook comes the decline of paperwork some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

It has been argued by some
individuasl
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individuals
 that the increasing popularity of ebooks
result
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results
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 in less use of paperwork is a better step forward
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 at the same time, others do not agree
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 essay is going to explain both the merits and demerits of
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 fashion.
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the increasing
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number of
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apply
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use of ebooks has benefits in several ways,
its
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it's
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 easy to carry
any where
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anywhere
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 without
heavy
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the heavy
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 weight
like
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books
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 and
dont
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doesn't
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.
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, in
ebook
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an ebook
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 there are many varieties of
books
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 available that you can read without going to buy
books
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 in stationary or
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library
.
Least
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amout
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amount
 of using
paper based
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paper-based
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books
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 can help in less deforestation because papers are made from wood.
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, the
down side
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downside
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 of
these
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 trend is since technology
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has
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 replaced
by
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human
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work,
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 many people can lose their jobs because they
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don't
 need to print papers anymore. which can lead to unemployment in certain areas.

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The introduction needs to be clearer and should include a thesis statement that outlines the main points of the essay.
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Use clearer topic sentences to begin each paragraph to guide the reader.
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Add examples or details to support your points, making your argument stronger.
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Check for grammar mistakes and ensure correct sentence structures to improve clarity.
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The essay presents both sides of the argument, which is a good approach to the task.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ebook
  • paperwork
  • accessibility
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • students
  • travelers
  • cheap
  • update
  • feeling
  • holding
  • health
  • eye strain
  • learning
  • information
  • remember
  • pages
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