The graph shows the percentage of Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph shows the percentage of Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows the percentage of Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph displays the proportion of Australians who worked in
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five different
feilds
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fields
from 1962 to 2012.
Overall
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, the services sector witnessed the highest increase over the time period,
while
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manufacturing and agriculture declined. Both construction and mining remained
steble
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stable
during that period. On the one hand, almost 55% of
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Australians worked in the services sector in 1962
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number increased rapidly over the years to peak at just under 80% in 2010.
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however
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, the percentage of people who worked in manufacturing was approximately 25% in
1962
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1962,
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while
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in
agriculture
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agriculture,
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they were just above 19%
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the same year. Both numbers had
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decreased
to 10% and about 5% respectively
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manufacturing witnessing the highest fall among the five industries.  Construction and mining proportions were stable over the years. Construction rates were almost 10 % in 1962 and
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in 2010 ,
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whereas
mining proportions
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approximately no more than 5% in the given time period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • workforce
  • industry
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • period
  • stable
  • significant
  • distribution
  • overview
  • relevant
  • analyse
  • highlight
  • overview
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