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Band 1.5

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case?

There are 2 primary reasons why it is
essencial
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essential
 to own their houses in some nations. The first one is a house
would
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that would
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 be a valuable property for the family. Owners invest by saving their money to build the
home
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 for themselves and
also
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 for their children in the future. Another reason is that in some countries, owning the
accomodation
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accommodation
 means settling down and being stable. After that, they can concentrate on their job or careers.
Moreover
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, all members of the family have responsibilities to take care of their
home
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. It connects their relationship
and
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, and
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home
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 is the place
people
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where people
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 go anywhere can still go back
home
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 to see their family.

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task achievement
Try to clearly introduce the topic and give a strong conclusion at the end. This helps the reader understand your main points better.
coherence
Make sure each reason is clearly separated and easy to follow. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
task achievement
Include more specific examples or details to support your points. This makes your argument stronger and more convincing.
content
You provided two clear reasons for why owning a home is important. This shows that you can think about the topic and argue your point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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