Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many argue that in the future,
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species will need to search for another
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to reside
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environmental issues on
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. I strongly disagree with
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view for two main reasons
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is the most well-established
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among all planets and, currently, individuals and corporations are implementing several
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to tackle environmental problems. One primary reason I agree with
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opinion is that
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is the most ideal
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to live on in the solar system.
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is because the
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of
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amount of nature, water, air, and other natural resources
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but
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infrastructures to live an ideal life. It is more likely not possible to migrate
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a new
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and build all natural and man-made resources from scratch. To illustrate, building developed countries,
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as Japan or South
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took approximately six decades (1940-2000), which showed that
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of life is a complex challenge.
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, nowadays, humans are becoming more aware of protecting the environment.
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is because
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from all around the world, supported by Global Environment Non-governmental Organisations, initiated massive campaigns and initiatives to save the
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through simultaneous small movements. Those include encouraging individuals to shift from using private transportation to public transportation, resulting in
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carbon
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in carbon
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emmission
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emissions
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take part in
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movement by investing heavily in research regarding product development and environmental impact on the product, and eventually producing electric vehicles that are environmentally friendly. Those measures done by both individuals and companies help
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the
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to be the safest
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.
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, I strongly disagree with the idea that
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people cannot survive
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due to
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environmental issues, as the
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is the most proper place to live on and people are trying their best to help
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the
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that connects to your argument.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your ideas. For instance, mention specific campaigns or groups that made a difference.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence structures. Some sentences are a bit long and could be clearer if they were shorter.
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You present a clear opinion on the topic and support it with reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction clearly states your view, which helps the reader understand your position right away.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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