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Writing Samples
Band 3

Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists.

Musicians and artists are considered less important than
scientists
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 and
technology
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experts
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 in modern
life
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. In my opinion, I agree with
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 view because
scientists
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 and
technology
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experts
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 produce innovations
making
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, making
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 human
life
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 easier
and
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, and
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 the industry they are in generates greater economic value.
Scientists
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 and
technology
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experts
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 have taken a very important role in
this
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 century as they
took
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 responsibility to advance our
life
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 standards with technological developments.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 they are given special interest within the modern society compared to other professions. The innovations they made were crucial to increase comfort
especially
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, especially
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 when
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the condition
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condition
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conditions
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 of people from 100 years ago are considered. It is generally believed that one of the biggest inventions would be
car
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the car
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due to
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 the fact that it made it possible to reach far places in a shorter time
comfortly
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comfortably
. Another major factor is that the added value of products that
scientists
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 or
technology
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experts
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 provide is significantly higher than that of artists or musicians. Even though the market for artists is big, the market for
technology
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 and the sectors that it directly affects
is
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are
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 far bigger in terms of economic outputs.
Technology
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 is not just a product to sell; it presents an unprecedented tool to make
life
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 easier for everyone. The most recent example is that artificial intelligence
became
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has become
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 a crucial part of most individuals and businesses to get things done quickly and easily.

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task achievement
Make sure your ideas are clear and fully developed. Provide more examples or details to support your points. This will help your reader understand your argument better.
coherence
Use connectives or linking words to guide your reader through your essay. This will improve the flow of your writing and make it easier to follow.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for task achievement.
coherence
Your introduction gives a good overview of your main argument, setting the stage for the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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