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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in jive different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in jive different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
table
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 graph illustrates
people
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people's
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 spending on
a
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various
of
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services in five nations in
year
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the year
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 2002. In
genral
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general
,
The
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the
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 highest
catgory
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category
 spending by people in the
table
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 is food, drinks, and
tabacco
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tobacco
,
while
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 the least rate is by far leisure and
eduication
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education
. In the beginning, Turkey is not only the top
contury
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country
 in the graph in food
,
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 and drinks with 32.14 per cent , but
also
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 is the highest in education with 4.35 per cent.
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, the
secnod
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second
 place
takes
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 by
ireland
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Ireland
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 with 28.91% in consumable
item
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items
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such
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 as food, drinks, and
tabacco
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tobacco
. It is clear
as
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, as
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 shown in the
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table
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table,
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 that Italy, which is the
capial
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capital
 of fashion, takes the highest spending on clothing and footwear with 9.00 per cent,
wheras
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whereas
 Sweden is in the lowest part
in
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of
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 the
table
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 with 5.4%.
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, Spain place at the lowest spending
in
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on
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 education and clothing items.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words table with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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