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Many think in today's world it is very difficult for people to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Others, However, feel that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many think in
nowdays
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today's
 world it is very hard for people to maintain a healthy lifestyle.
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 , others feel
that
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is it
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it is
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 easy to be healthy and fit if they want to be .
Fitstly
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Firstly
, the people who
see
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find
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 it difficult to
mainthain
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maintain
 a healthy lifestyle
they
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apply
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have a point ,
becous offcors
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because of course
 they try to be healthy in one day ,but they
couldn't
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.
for
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For
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exmaple
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example
, me i tried to be healthy
ones
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once
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,but i. couldn't.
Secondly
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, the people who see
its
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 easy to be healthy and have a healthy lifestyle , they have different circumstances. Conclude,
its
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it's
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depent
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dependent
 on the person himself .

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Make sure to clearly explain your points with enough detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better, like 'firstly', 'on the other hand', and 'in conclusion'.
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Try to expand your examples and give more personal experiences or facts.
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You mentioned both views, which is good for the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your opinion is present in the conclusion, which is important.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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