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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the proportion of national consumer expenditure in three categories: food, drinks, and tobacco; clothing and footwear; and
leisure
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 and
education
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 in five countries during 2002.
Overall
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, food, drinks, and tobacco dominated the national consumer expenditure proportion,
while
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leisure
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 and
education
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 data recorded the lowest rate across all nations. Examining the ratio
food
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of food
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, drinks, and tobacco data in detail, Turkey demonstrated the highest ratio at 32,14%, which was
the
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a
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 higher proportion than other countries.
Additionally
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,
while
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 Ireland ranked second at 28,19%, Italy and
Sweden
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 had a similar percentage with 18,8% and 16,36% respectively.
Sweden
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 showed the lowest rate at just over 15,77%.
In contrast
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, clothing and footwear, and
leisure
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 and
education
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 figures represented a much smaller
of
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proportion of
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 national spending on consumption. Regarding clothing and footwear statistics, Italy led
this
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 category at 9%,
whereas
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Sweden
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 allocated the lowest funding on national consumption at 5,4%. Turkey, Spain, and Ireland
maintaned
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maintained
 similar values between 6,63% and 6,43%.
Furthermore
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, in terms of
leisure
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 and
education
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 data, Turkey recorded the
most
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apply
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lowest rate of national consumer expenditure at 4,35%,
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followed
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 by
Sweden
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 at 3,22%.
Subsequently
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, other countries provided similar
percetages
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percentages
 between 3,2% and 1,98% respectively, with Spain
the
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having the
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 lowest ratio.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure, education, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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