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Band 4.5

*ASSIGNMENT* Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. *Discuss both sides and give your opinion

there is no denying the fact that the limitation of the speed in the car system enhance the safety on the streets ,
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 its commonly held belife that there is another ways to reduce the car accedints and improve the safety on the roads , there
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 an argument that opposes it , in my opinion, i consider that there is much ways to creat safe driving roads
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 with , limitation of the speed number on the vehicles made all the drivers must comply the regulations , in another words , even the carless youth who attend to exeed speed limits there well be no chance to do
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 as things so
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 well make the roud more safe and more organized ,
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 , all chinese cars are with limit speed so
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 reduces the car accidents
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consider
, developing the educational system for all the drivers of the
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also
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 license is
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beneficial
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benifecial,
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 that
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 decrease the chance of
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apply
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accidents
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moreover
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, if the government
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 racing
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tracks,
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well
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leads
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 the youths to do
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 hobbies in the correct place
far
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 away from the normal
rouds
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roads
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for
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 instance , Saudi
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Arabia
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 made racing tracks in every
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also
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 improves the safe driving on the
rouds
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roads
 and streets
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 conclusion , despite people having different views , I think that the best strategy the state should do is
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 the learning system of the drivers and build places
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where
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 the
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young
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 can be more
confortable
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comfortable
 when they
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are triying
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triying
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trying
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hobbeis
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hobbies

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have clear paragraphs for each main idea. This helps the reader follow your thoughts more easily.
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Check your spelling and grammar. Many small mistakes can make it harder to understand your points.
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Give more specific examples to support your ideas. This makes your argument stronger and more convincing.
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You have discussed both sides of the argument, which is good for task response.
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You provided some examples that are relevant to your points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maximum speed limits
  • road safety
  • accidents
  • human error
  • road infrastructure
  • pedestrian crossings
  • advanced driver-assistance systems (ADAS)
  • strict enforcement
  • traffic violations
  • public education campaigns
  • safe driving habits
  • defensive driving skills
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