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Writing Samples
Band 4

Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

On the one hand, one compelling argument in
favor
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 of making public transport free through government funding is its potential to reduce traffic congestion and environmental pollution.
In particular
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, if more people are encouraged to use buses and trains
instead
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 of private cars, there will be fewer vehicles on the roads, which directly leads to lower carbon emissions and faster commutes.
Moreover
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, free access to public transport promotes social equity by ensuring that low-income individuals can travel for work, education, and healthcare without financial barriers.
For example
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, in Germany, the government launched a nationwide initiative to encourage the use of public transport, which resulted in a noticeable increase in the number of passengers and helped reduce pollution levels in urban areas.
Nevertheless
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, some critics argue that the financial burden on the government may outweigh the benefits, especially in countries with limited budgets.

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Try to include a clear introduction that states your main opinion or position on the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to include a conclusion that summarizes your points and restates your opinion clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better and help the reader follow your argument.
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Add more specific examples to support your points and make your argument stronger.
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You provide a relevant example from Germany that supports the argument for free public transport.
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Your argument about reducing traffic and pollution is clear and relevant to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidize
  • sustainability
  • commuters
  • congestion
  • infrastructure
  • accommodate
  • equitable access
  • public transportation system
  • allocating resources
  • financial burden
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