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Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done discuss both size and give your own opinion

There is a debate over whether some people believe that actions of
crime
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 must be taken,
while
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 others think that take of the
crime
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 and finding a solution, I believe that
offence
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the offence
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 size must be considered. On the one hand, there are several parts of increasing the
crime
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 range in publicity, and to
cover
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address
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this
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 should be taken up from that and decline the
crime
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 range in the city.
starting
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 from the main point,
in
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apply
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these
days
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days,
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 a lot of offences and many people try to find a solution for
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. It can provide the government with full support
They
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. They
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 must take to work and provide for
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 job
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; they
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 must. The government should take a rule and strictly should be provide by
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 law.
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 there must be a look at the situations to determine how crimes are classified a felonies.
On the other hand
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, there can be some issues in
providing
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addressing
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this
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 problem and to take to responsibility,
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, it can be dangerous in some cases,
such
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 as strong at the murdering, and injuries. By looking at
this
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 , the state or police officers have to be more careful.
However
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, they believe that
crime
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 is deeply rooted in issues like poverty,inequality, and even human psychology. Even in highly developed countries with strict laws, crimes
such
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 as theft, cybercrime, and corruption still occur.
According to
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this
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 view, no matter how many measures are taken, a complete elimination of
crime
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 is unrealistic. In my opinion,
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crime
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 cannot be completely eradicated, I believe that an effective way to reduce
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 is not only about completely reducing
crime
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 to zero
case
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cases
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,
however
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 it should be providing practical consistency by the government, communities, and individuals.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring your paragraphs better. Include clear topic sentences to outline your main points.
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Make sure each point you present is clearly supported by examples or evidence.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use simpler sentences to communicate your ideas more clearly without confusion.
task achievement
You show an understanding of different viewpoints on crime prevention.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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