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Many couples end their marriages with a divorce. What are its causes and effects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is widspreaded delema which is facing among new couples when they can not build relationships for long term period because of several communication issues,
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 as misunderstanding which leading for failure to accept personality of each other and finance, which most
people
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 think as a main point which support the relationship, it could be solved by widely exploring inner world and lasting the initial period of acquaintance. Mainly, throughout life
people
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 need to be in touch with someone who can share
the
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their
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 emotions and
experience
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experiences
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 by supporting each other and being
belived
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believed
from
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by
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 another person. In comparison, nowadays the true
defenition
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definition
 of love
changed
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has changed
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 for
people
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and
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, and
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 everyone has their view about it
,
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.
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for
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For
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some
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some,
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 it is connected with finance and physical
matterns
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matters
,
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;
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 in
contrary
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contrast
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, in
past
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the past
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people
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, people
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 looked for
partner
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a partner
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 who had social skills and
great
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a great
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 sense of duty.
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, many
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task achievement
Make sure to have a clear introduction that states your main points. It helps the reader understand your argument better.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas. This will help your essay flow better and make it easier to follow.
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Provide specific examples to support your points. This could make your argument stronger and more convincing.
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You have raised some important points about communication issues and finance in relationships.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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