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Band 2.5

The flowchart cearly demonstrated how instant noodles are manufactured.

The flowchart clearly illustrates how
instant
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 noodles are manufactured.
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, the manufacturing of
instant
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 noodles is a linear and
mechanized
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 process which involves eight distinct stages, with two main
phase
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phases
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 including the
procudeure
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production
 of noodle discs and packaging for
saling
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selling
. At the initial stage, flour is delivered by trucks and stored in large silos.
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, flour is mixed with water and
oil
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oil,
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 where a mixture before turning
to
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into
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 the
dough
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which
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, which
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 will be
transfered
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transferred
 to rollers
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then
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, then
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cutted
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cut
 and
shapped
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shaped
to
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into
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dough
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 sheets.
after
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 that
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dough
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, dough
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 sheets will be
mold
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moulded
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as
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into
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dough
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disc
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discs
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 by machines
,
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.
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The next step is
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dough
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disc
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discs
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 will be fried and cooled before they have been put into
cup
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cups
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 where
vegetablesand
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vegetables and
 spices will be added. After
previous
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the previous
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 step is over,
coming
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we come
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 to the packaging phase.
with
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With
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 labelling and sealing those
instant
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 cups marks the
finishment
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completion
 of
lables
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labels
.
Enventually
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Eventually
,which is the end of
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the packageing
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packageing
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packaging
 process of
instant
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 noodles.
This
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 marks the completion of the production process.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear and simple sentences. Check for word choices to avoid confusion.
coherence and cohesion
Include a clear conclusion to summarize your main points. It helps to show the end of your response.
task achievement
Provide more details on each step if possible to better explain the process of making instant noodles.
coherence and cohesion
Use phrases to connect your ideas better, like 'first', 'next', and 'finally', to show the order of the steps.
task achievement
The flowchart is well described with a clear understanding of the process steps.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay shows that you understand the key phases involved in the production of instant noodles.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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