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Writing Samples
Band 7

You had a meeting with many jobseekers and you were dissaisfied with your stay write a letter to meeting organizer, In your letter # Provide the detailsof yout meeting # Explain what you ere dissatisfied with # suggest what the hotel should do to resolve issue

Dear Mr. Williams, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the accommodation provided during my recent stay at your hotel for the RBC Bank
jobseekers’
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job seekers’
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 networking event. I attended the two-day conference held on the 23rd and 24th of
last
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 month, during which I represented the RBC Hilton branch.
While
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 the meeting itself was
well-organized
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well-organised
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, my experience with the hotel facilities was far from satisfactory.
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 with, the cleanliness of the room did not meet acceptable standards. The towels and bed linens appeared to be used and had an unpleasant
odor
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odour
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.
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, the air conditioning unit in the room was not functioning, which made it very difficult to sleep comfortably in the evenings. To make matters worse, the Wi-Fi connection was unreliable, which disrupted my ability to prepare for presentations and communicate with colleagues.
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 I brought these issues to the attention of the reception staff, no action was taken, which was quite disappointing. To prevent
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 issues in the future, I suggest that the hotel
ensures
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ensure
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 all rooms are thoroughly cleaned and inspected before guests arrive.
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, prompt technical support should be provided when problems are reported. Thank you for your attention to
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 matter. I hope these concerns will be addressed to improve future experiences for other guests. Yours sincerely, Ozguc Dalga

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task response
Consider adding more specific examples to support your points, especially about the meeting.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly supports the main idea without unnecessary detail.
coherence and cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structures to make the writing more engaging.
task achievement
The letter has a clear and polite tone, which is suitable for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
You have organized your thoughts well with separate paragraphs for different issues.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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