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The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010

The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010
The graph provides key information about the gross local
product
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 of
The
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the
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USA
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,
China
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, Japan, and Germany between 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is clear
form
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 the chart that the amount of domestic
product
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 in
China
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doupled
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doubled
 twice.
In contrast
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,
The
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the
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USA
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remeined
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remained
 the first country
at
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in
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 the
gross
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of gross
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 local
product
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 in the world.
According to
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 what is shown,
The
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the
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USA
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USA's
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overall
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 economic value in 2005
were
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 at 13000,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 in
2010
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2010,
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The
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the
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USA
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 increased up to 14000+ . The GDP of
China
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 in 2005 reached just above 2000, but in 2010
grow
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grew
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 to 6000 in just 5 years,
China
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 was the
most growing
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fastest-growing
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 country in the period of 2005 to 2010.
On the other hand
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, the economic output of Japan in 2005
were
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was
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 at just under 5000.
Furthermore
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, in 2010 Japan
become
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became
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 5500. The gross domestic
product
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 in Germany in the period of 2005
,
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apply
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were
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was
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 just under 3000.
Moreover
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, in 2010, Germany
become
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became
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 the least country increasing between 2005 and 2010, it
stoped
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stopped
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 at just above 3000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words product, usa, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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