The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Overall
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, the process
include
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includes
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seven distinct
stage
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stages
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,
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. It
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it is clear that
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the procedure is linear,
staring
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starting
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from
sugar
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canes
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growing and culminating in drying and cooling
sugar
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.
To begin
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with, it takes 12 to 18 months for
sugar
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canes
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to grow
up
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apply
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.
Then
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, the mature
canes
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are harvested in two ways,one is by
man
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hand
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and the other is by
harvesting
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a harvesting
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machine
which
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, which
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has much higher efficiency than
labors
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labour
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.
Following
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this
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, the
sugar
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canes
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are squeezed into
juice
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in
crushing
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a crushing
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machine
which
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, which
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is ready for the next process. In the next stage, the
juice
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is purified in a limestone filter to get pure
juice
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. Afterwards, the pure
juice
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is put into
evaporator
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an evaporator
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, the container is heated all the time
and
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, and
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juice
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the juice
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becomes syrup. At the same time, the syrup goes into
centrifuge
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a centrifuge
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where
seperate
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the
sugar
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crystals
from
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are separated from
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syrup
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the syrup
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.
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Finally
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Finally,
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the
sugar
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crystals dry and cool in a container and become
sugar
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, the final product.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes, juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 0 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • manufacturing process
  • cleaning
  • sanitation
  • quality control
  • crushing
  • extracted juice
  • boiling
  • concentrated syrup
  • crystallization
  • sugar crystals
  • separation
  • molasses
  • purity
  • quality
  • food processing
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