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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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This
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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. This helps the reader understand your position.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (like 'firstly', 'on the other hand', 'in conclusion') to connect your ideas and make your essay easier to follow.
task achievement
Provide clear examples to support your points. This will make your ideas stronger and clearer for the reader.
task achievement
You have made a clear effort to discuss both sides of the issue, which shows good understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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