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the chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040

the chart below shows the Japan’s population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040
The line chart illustrates changes in the proportion of Japan's
population
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 across three different age groups from 1960, with projections until 2040.
Overall
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, the
population
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 of both children and adults are expected to decline,
while
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 the number of the elderly
population
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 will increase significantly. At the beginning of the period, the proportion of children in the
population
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 increased from 30% in 1960 to 35% in 1970.
Then
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, the
population
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 significantly fell to only 10% as projected for the future, which will be the lowest among all groups.
Similarly
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, the adult
population
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 dropped slightly from 70% to around 59%,
although
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this
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 figure remained higher than the other age groups throughout the period.
In contrast
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, the elderly
population
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 grew consistently over time, rising from 5% in 1960 to 30% in 2020.
This
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 upward trend is projected to continue, reaching approximately 35% by 2040, making it nearly equal to the adult
population
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 by that year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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