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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level. However, some says that individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some
community
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communities
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 believe that free education should be provided by the authority at each level of the educational system.
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 other folk say that it should be paid by someone who wants to continue their
studies
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. I will argue both sides and
make
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 my point of view.
It is clear that
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 the law is responsible for people's
studies
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. Studying for any degree without paying money is a right for everyone, which raises the level of society in every aspect.
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, taxes are paid to the power for many reasons. Most importantly, it must be used for individual education. There are many reasons why the
politics
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 have to prepare an environment for
community
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the community
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who
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that
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 cannot pay for their
studies
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 because they have financial problems. So, the union helps them to continue their class program. From my perspective,
It
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 is the best thing if the rule
provide
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provides
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 free inquiry for everyone. In many cases, society
are
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is
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 affluent and can pay for their
studies
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. It is not fair that they
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investigation
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due to
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because
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 it is a role everyone must
course
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take
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 for free.
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, some people take part in a university that other
population
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populations
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 have to abandon their
studies
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 because they do not have a chance to
participant
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that
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in that
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 university.
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, the authority must search who have a good life and can pay for their examination.
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, providing chances for poverty students. In my opinion, it is the best thing they can do.
To sum up
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, it is obvious that some folk think the state is an organisation
that is
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 responsible for providing free
course
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courses
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.
On the other hand
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, some of them think
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it
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they
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 must pay for their education by themselves. To the best of my knowledge, the politics should give free investigation plans to
community
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the community
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Use a topic sentence to help the reader understand what you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with spelling and grammar. There are some mistakes that might confuse the reader.
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Use more specific examples to support your ideas. This will make your argument stronger.
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Make sure to clearly state your opinion at the end of the essay. This helps to show your point of view.
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You have good ideas about the importance of education for society.
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You presented both sides of the argument well in your essay.
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