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The bar chart illustrates the production output from Asia, Eurpoe and the rest of the world during 1840 and 2000 years.

The bar chart illustrates the production output from Asia, Eurpoe and the rest of the world during 1840 and 2000 years.
The bar chart illustrates the
production
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 output from Asia,
Eurpoe
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Europe
 and the rest of the world during 1840 and 2000
years
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apply
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.
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,
it is clear that
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 Aisa had the highest
production
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 across other cities
in
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during the whole period.
While
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Europe
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European
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production
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 fluctuated and hit
the
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its
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 maximum in 1920. It is
also
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 noticeable that the
production
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 of the rest of the world showed a gradual increase until the end. In
details
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detail
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, the output
production
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 of Asia hit the peak in 1840 at 50,
then
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 it showed
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a
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sharply
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 drop to 20 in 1920.In 1960,Asia
production
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 increased to
25
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25,
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then
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 it
increased
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doubled in 2000. Meanwhile,
Europe
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European
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production
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 experienced a gradual
increased
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increase
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 between 1840 and
1920
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1920,
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 around 40 to
50
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50,
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then
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it's
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it
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 dropped in the
last
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 two years and hit a low point
less
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of less
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 than 30.The rest of the
world
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world's
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production
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,
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 started at
low
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a low
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 point around
10
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10,
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then
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 it significantly grew to 40 from 1840 and 1960.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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