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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart provides key information about different transportation
used
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modes used
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 for several purposes in one city in Europe for various decades 1960,1980
and
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, and
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 2000.The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that car
transpot
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transport
it
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apply
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started to be the lowest one,
then
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 it had a considerable
increased
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increase
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 to
becaming
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become
 the highest one .
In addition
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, the tube's level remained fluctuating,
whereas
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 using the bus continued to
decreased
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decrease
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 significantly.
According to
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 what is shown, the train reached
to
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its peak in 1980 at 27 per cent
but
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, but
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 in 2000 it declined slightly to almost 22%.
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,
car
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the car
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 started
approximately at
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at approximately
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 7% in 1980 and in 2000 it
jumbed
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jumped
 to more than five times. In terms of the bus showed it had at 39% after that it dropped rapidly
more
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, more
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 than half to 15 % between 1980 to 2000.
the
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The
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 usage of
tube
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tubes
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 in 1960 was more than
quarter
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a quarter
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