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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The given chart represents how
weekly
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the weekly
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 incomes of families in one country in 1968 and 2018
is
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are
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 distributed
amoung
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among
 8
goods
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(Food, housing, fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, household
goods
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, transport, and leisure).
Overall
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, even though almost every field increased or decreased nearly twice, the main changes were
underwent
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undergone
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 by food, housing, transport, and leisure. The
less
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least
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differenses
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differences
 were seen by fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and personal
goods
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. Household
goods
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 remained stable. Food was
subject
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the subject
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 of the most
shift
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significant shift
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 throughout
50
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the 50
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 years. In terms of fall, it plummeted from 35% to about 17% of weekly income.
Next,
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clothing and
footware
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footwear
 halved from 10%
into
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to
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 5%. Personal
goods
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 and fuel and power accounted for
decrease
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a decrease
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 by around 5% and 2% from
aproximately
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approximately
 8% and 6%, respectively. Leisure was the most to change among other
rised
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rising
good
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goods
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, multiplying by roundly 2.5 times from just under 10% to around 22%. Housing increased to nearly 20%, starting
by
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at
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 10%, and
trasnport
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transport
 increased by roughly 7% and became almost 15%. Household
goods
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 kept
its
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their
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 share of roughly 8%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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