IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different rigeons in a European country between 2004 and 2009

The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different rigeons in a European country between 2004 and 2009
The given table compares the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cinemas
Use synonyms
 in various places in a particular European country from 2004 to 2009.
Overall
Linking Words
,
while
Linking Words
 the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cinemas
Use synonyms
 increased in urban areas, that for rural areas experienced a noticeable decline over the period.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, starting at 1,512, the count of
cinemas
Use synonyms
 rose slightly to 1,620 in the City Centre in 2009.
According to
Linking Words
 Near City Centre, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cinemas
Use synonyms
 saw the biggest change (33,33%) from 300 to 400 in 5 years.
In contrast
Linking Words
, there were 40
cinemas
Use synonyms
 in suburban places in a European country, after which it declined to 30.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
cinemas
Use synonyms
 which were located in the countryside decreased significantly in 2009, reaching 90 , by 16.67%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cinemas with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: