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The two maps illustrate the main changes in the Lynwich university between 2006 and today.

The two maps illustrate the main changes in the Lynwich university between 2006 and today.
The two maps illustrate the main changes in the Lynwich
university
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University
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 between 2006 and today.
Overall
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, the most
development
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significant development
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 change is the expansion of roads and
buildings
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 around the college. Looking for the details, there used to be a car park in the northeast of the university, but now it has been rebuilt with a car park and a bike storage. Running from the east to the southeast, in the past, there
were
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was
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 a library and a
sport
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sports
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 field, but it
have
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has
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 been redeveloped
by
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into
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sports
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a sports
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 centre and
sports
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a sports
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 field. In 2006, there were green areas running from the north to
southwest
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the southwest
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, which
have been
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were
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 cleared to make way for
library
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a library
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 in the southwest and
road
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a road
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 on the north side. It is important to note that college
buildings
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 are still in the same location
in
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at
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 present. The roads
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also have
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have also
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 been expanded to give access for students to reach the
buildings
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 around the campus. There are two
buildings
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 that have been introduced
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such
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, such
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 as
bus
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a bus
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 stop in
northern
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the northern
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 part and
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a cafetaria
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cafetaria
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cafeteria
 in the middle of the university.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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