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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.
The table compares the manufacture of
milk
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 annually in four countries , namely the
Netherlands
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,
Australia
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,
Tanzania
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 and
Guatemala
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 , over the period of 40 years (1990-2010)
Overall
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,
while
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 the figure of dairy production in the
Netherlands
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 dominated
initially
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, in
Australia
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 the number was falling gradually to the end of the period, and in
Tanzania
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 and
Guatemala
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 has consistently been produced at least. In 1990, 11,262,000 litres of
milk
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 were produced in the
Netherlands
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. As
this
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 figure was higher than the next highest, production
milk
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 in
Australia
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 at 11,246,000 litres,
this
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 species clearly dominated at that time.
However
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, the manufacturing fell slightly in 2000 and rose gradually in 2010. (11,155,000 and 11,466,000) In fact, the number of dairy products in
Australia
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 dropped slightly to 11,105,000 in 2000, and continued increasing to 9,165,000 in 2010.
In contrast
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, the statistic of dairy products in
Tanzania
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 and
Guatemala
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 was continually cultivated in relatively small amounts, beginning at only 87,000 (
Tanzania
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) and 26,000 (
Guatemala
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) litres in 1990.
Although
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 they did increase steadily to the amount of 1,42,000 and 55,000 in 2000, by the end of 2010, they didn’t surpass the figure of
milk
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 made in the
Netherlands
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 and
Australia
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 (1,55,000 and 84,000).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, netherlands, australia, tanzania, guatemala with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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