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Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

Society has drastically changed compared to the past, especially when it comes to
technology
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. Many
people
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 rely heavily on
technology
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 in their daily
work
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.
However
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, sometimes it becomes an unhealthy habit.
This
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 essay will explain both how it changes our
work
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 life and the disadvantages it can bring.
Technology
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 can make our lives easier.
First,
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it saves time.
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,
people
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 can search and learn anything related to their
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.
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,some
people
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use
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 some programs that make their
work
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 less and faster.
For example
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, AI and some other applications. But, how do they
use
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 AI in their
work
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 exactly? They
use
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 it in their documents and presentations.
On the other hand
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,
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 can
also
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 have many disadvantages. To start with, it causes health problems .
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, poor eyesight, back pain and
lack
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 of many vitamins.
Second,
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it is a waste of time. Many children and teenagers sit on their
laptop
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laptops
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 or their
ipad
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iPads
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 surfing the internet for a long period of time.
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it encourages
people
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 to be lazier by relying on
technology
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. In conclusion, using the internet for our benefit is important
but
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 it's not more important than our health.
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, the human brain is more capable than any
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 invented.
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, balance is the key to
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 it wisely

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structure
Put one main idea in each para and give a small fact or detail for it.
development
Make the idea in one line and add a clear example.
language
Keep sentences short and clear to avoid long mistakes.
conclusion
End with a short line that restates your key point.
content
The plan shows good form: talk about good side and bad side.
coherence
Link words are used to join ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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