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You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter your friend. In your letter: Say where you are going Describe your house Explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house •You should •You do NOT need to write your own address

Dear Ali,
i
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 hope all things are right. I want your help in order to look after my house during my trip. Actually, because of the pressures of life, I decided to
have
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take
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 a trip. I am going to Phuket in Thailand. There is a seaside town with beautiful islands and vibrant people. My house is quite small with a sunny balcony located in downtown. The most important thing I must mention
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that
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apply
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is my small garden, which
situated
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is situated
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 on the balcony. I want you to irrigate my garden and pay the bills. Of course, I have placed some money on the
cupboar
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cupboard
 on top of the oven. Thank you very much for your assistance in
this
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 matter. regards, Mohammadreza

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly mention how long you'll be away in your letter.
coherence
Try to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs for easy reading.
task achievement
You provided a clear reason for your trip and described your house well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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