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Bar chart shows the number of international tourists visiting four European citiest

Bar chart shows the number of international tourists visiting four European citiest
The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of international tourists visiting four European cities (
Paris
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, Rome,
Berlin
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, and Madrid) in 2020, 2021, and 2022. The units are measured in millions. Overview:
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Paris
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 had the highest figures,
while
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Berlin
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 had the lowest. In general, there was an upward trend in the
number
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 of tourists in most cities over the period. Details (paragraph 1): In 2020,
Paris
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 recorded the highest
number
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 at around 12
million
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,
whereas
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Berlin
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 was significantly lower at 4
million
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. By 2022, the
number
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 of tourists in
Paris
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 increased to 15
million
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. Details (paragraph 2): Meanwhile, the figures for Rome and Madrid
also
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 changed from 8
million
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 and 6
million
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 in 2020 to 10
million
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 and 9
million
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 in 2022, respectively. The gap between
Paris
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 and
Berlin
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 remained significant throughout the years. Compared to Rome, Madrid had a lower figure in 2020 but managed to narrow the difference by 2022.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, paris, berlin, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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