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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. What are the causes of this problem? What measures can be taken to solve this?

It cannot be denied that
food
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wasting
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 is a common problem and
increasing
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is increasing
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 day by day
in
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all over the world. There are some factors which cause
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, but measures can be implemented to solve
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isue
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issue
. Today's world
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encourages
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 people to overconsume
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everything,
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include
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including
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food
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. In my point of view, social media has a significant impact
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on doing
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 so. Especially, there are some content creators
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who
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 use
food
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 to
pranck
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prank
 someone and make a video about it
for getting
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to get
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 viewers and subscribers. Needless to say,
this
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 type of
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make
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makes
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 a negative impact on young generations and
spread
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food
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wasting to
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waste
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 all over the world.
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 may make them not
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aware of the importance of
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 matter and encourage
to
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them to
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 create
simillar
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similar
 videos to make easy money. When it comes to
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this
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 problem,
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again,
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 social media could be a significant tool to make people understand how wasted
food
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 will impact us in
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the
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 long period of time.
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, some volunteer content creators may be found
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, and
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government
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the government
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 or some
organizations
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organisations
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 could make collaborations with them. Especially,
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contents
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 should target the young generations and show them the importance of stopping the waste. Another measure could be adding some classes to increase
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awareness in schools.
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, learning
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method
 should not be
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forced
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to
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on
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 students to take it
but
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, but
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 encourage
to
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them to
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 spread
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awarness
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awareness
 with their friends. In conclusion,
food
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 waste is one of the most important issues
in
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over
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 the
last
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 20 years. Obviously, there is no one reason to cause
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 problem.
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, some measures should be
take
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taken
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in
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into
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 consideration to prevent
increasing
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the increasing
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 rate of wasting
food
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.

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Task Achievement
Improve the introduction by clearly stating the causes and solutions to food waste. This will make your essay more focused.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that you connect ideas smoothly with linking words.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points, such as statistics on food waste or successful programs in schools.
Task Achievement
You address the issue and provide solutions, showing a good understanding of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your use of paragraphs helps organize your ideas and makes it easier to follow your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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