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Band 4.5

some people think that the role of teachers will soon be replaced by technology. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years,
technology
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 has transformed the way
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teaching
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 Some people believe that the contribution from
teacher
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teachers
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 will soon
replaced
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 by digital gadgets and software
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applications
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has
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have
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 been
integral
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an integral
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 part of
education
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, the development in
technology
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 has made it
more
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easier and
cost- effective
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more cost-effective
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 to obtain
education
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. I strongly agree with
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 statement reason will be discussed in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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educator
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educators
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 are going to less demanding
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felexibilty
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flexibility
.
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while
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 mentorship and real classes may be effective for social norms alongside
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studies, the recorded lectures and easy access encouraged students to choose
technology
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which
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, which
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result
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results
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 in
decreasing
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a decrease in
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demand
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the demand
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of
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 teachers.
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,
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another vital reason is
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.
The most of
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 time
the
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 fee and other expenses
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 as travel
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 and uniforms make the study less affordable
in person
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 classes
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 on the other
side
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hand
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, with the help of
technology
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, online
education
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expenses
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expenses,
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makes
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making
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effective
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 for students. No doubt the benefits of the latest
technology
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 are going to replace the majority of educators
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 the social norms, real experience and moral values may
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decline in learners.
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,
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 artificial intelligence will play a major role in
education
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 by making it convenient, more
accessable
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accessible
 and affordable, students may get isolated indoors and
lack
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a lack
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 of
real world
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 experience might hinder their professional growth.
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Conclusion
, I strongly agree that
teacher
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teachers
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 or educators are going to
less
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be less
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 demanding or replaced by
technology
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 because of its affordability and
accessabilty
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accessibility
,
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however
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however,
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this
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 trend will make learners lack
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moral values and
real world
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 experience.

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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, showing your agreement with the statement.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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