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Band 7

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in forign countries. Discouse the advantages and disadvantages of this:

There is a shift in
students
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' preference for their choice of colleges and universities as they now tend to study abroad.
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 phenomenon has some advantages,
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 disadvantages.
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, studying in foreign
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 will broaden
students
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' knowledge and improve their adaptability to new situations. On the other side, some
students
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 may want to stay in the
countries
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 where they studied after graduation, and the home
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 will lose their potential human resource. It will cause 'brain drain' and even a reduction in population if they choose to change their nationality. From an academic aspect, some
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 have more developed technologies and advanced teaching.
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 will help overseas
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, especially if they are from underdeveloped
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, to gain more perspectives and skills. From a cultural aspect, living in a foreign environment will train student to familiarise themself with different situation or culture. Being able to tolerate distinct habits from our own is really important for
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, especially in
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 era of globalisation and fast fast-changing world.
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, if they prefer to work in a foreign
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 rather than going back home after graduation, it will be a problem. The knowledge that they get will not be applied to their
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 in some cases needs more. If
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 keeps happening for several years, the
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 may enter a phase called 'brain drain' in which it no longer has brilliant-minded
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 in the
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 to innovate and build the
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. Even worse, some
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 may change their nationality after studying abroad, and the home
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 will have a decrease in population, which will
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 have an impact on the economy.

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Make your introduction clearer by briefly stating the main points you will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Try to use clearer transitions between your paragraphs to guide the reader better.
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Add more specific examples to support your points, like mentioning specific countries or programs.
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You presented a balanced view of both advantages and disadvantages, which is essential for this type of essay.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas about cultural adaptation and brain drain are relevant and important.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • experience
  • culture
  • language
  • improvement
  • resume
  • employers
  • international
  • expensive
  • tuition
  • living costs
  • homesickness
  • family
  • friends
  • studies
  • mental health
  • adapting
  • education system
  • challenging
  • expectations
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