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The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995.

The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995.
The diagram constitutes information about a number of changes
of
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 the city called Shakefield and compares differences between years since 1995 until now.
Overall
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, the town has undergone significant changes in terms of residential areas and
transportation
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the transportation
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 system.
While
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 some original structures remained unchanged, new facilities included, Shakefield transformed into a more
up to date
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up-to-date
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 building and
tourist friendly
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tourist-friendly
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 location. In 1995, there had a simple layout with housing in the northwest,
hotel
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a hotel
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 and
public
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a public
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 park situated in the
center
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centre
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 of the town,
farmland
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and farmland
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 in the northeast.
Likewise
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,
coffee
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the coffee
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 shop and
hotel
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the hotel
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located
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are located
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 in the middle and southeast areas
respectively
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, respectively
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.
In addition
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, the fish and boat market took
a
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apply
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place
from
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on
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bottom
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the bottom
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 side of
coastal
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the coastal
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 region of the
area
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.
Conversely
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, when it comes to current locations, farmland and public park
replaced
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have been replaced
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to
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by
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 golf, tennis
course
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courses
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 and holiday homes.
Car
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A car
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 park
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also
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was also
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 constructed near
to
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apply
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the residential
area
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. Housing
area
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 expanded and added new facilities near there
including
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, including
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restaurant
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a restaurant
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has
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that has
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built
Verb problem
been built
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 near
to
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apply
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the
sport
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sports
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area
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.
In contrast
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 to other places,
coffee
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the coffee
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 shop remained unchanged. Apart from that,
coastal
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the coastal
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 side has been
modernized
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modernised
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 with yachts, fish market
replaced
Verb problem
has been replaced
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 with new apartments
now
Correct pronoun usage
that now
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 occupy the
area
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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