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The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.

The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.
The given table
highlitghts
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highlights
 major
informtion
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information
 about spending in 5 nations through the year 2002. The
uints
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units
 are
meguread
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measured
 in percentages. In
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general
genral
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genral,
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it is clear that
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 the expenditure on tobacco , food and drinks
have
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has
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 the highest
percent
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per cent
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,
wheras
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whereas
,
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apply
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the
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apply
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education and leisure
was
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were
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 the lowest.It is clearly from the data that Ireland
spend
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spends
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on
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more on
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the
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food
more
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than the
others
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other
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 sectors ,
in addition
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 the
iresh pople
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Irish people
 pay on the clothing almost 6.5
percent
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per cent
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. With regard to
Italy
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Italy,
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 the
spend
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expenditure
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 on
the
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footwear was nearly 9% ,
while
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 the expenditure on
the
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leisure was the
lwoest
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lowest
 sector. In terms of
Spain
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Spain,
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 the spending was nearly the with
Italy
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Italy's
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.
Furthermore
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 , on one
hand
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 Sweden has the lowest
spend
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spending
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 on
the
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food ,
on the other hand
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 ranked in second place in spending on
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education.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • consumer spending
  • cultural priorities
  • economic conditions
  • disposable income
  • standard of living
  • work-life balance
  • proportion of spending
  • cultural preferences
  • comparison of spending
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