You are being sent on a one-month work assignment in San Francisco, California. You need a place to stay while you are there. Write a letter to the Maury Samson Real Estate Agency. In your letter: explain the situation describe the kind of accommodation you would like and provide the dates you will need it. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Samson,

Dear Mr. Samson, I am writing in response to an advertisement I saw on the internet about your real estate agency, and even my colleagues recommended
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consult you regarding the accommodation in San Francisco, California. Actually, I have to come to the US for a work assignment, and I do not have any
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to stay;
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, I would like you to find a suitable
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in San Francisco for a one-month stay. There are
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things which I would like you to consider
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looking for a
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.
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, a 1 BHK flat near downtown is preferable as our company's head office is located in downtown, and
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will
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ease the issue of commuting.
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, it is a must to have a specified study
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in the house
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I will be working most of the time.
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but not least, it would be great if the
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will be isolate
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away from the city crowd and noise, as
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will help me to focus on the work appropriately. Would you kindly start looking for accommodation as soon as possible because I am supposed to land in California on August 15, 2025. To be specific, the dates of my stay would be from August 15 to September 15, 2025, and do not worry about the cost as my company will be covering all the expenses. The deposit will be sent to you once you have finalised the
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. Please feel free to contact me if you have any
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questions or queries. Yours sincerely, Simran Bhullar

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You could add more details about your work assignment to make it clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words to connect your ideas better, like 'also' or 'too'.
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You did a nice job explaining your needs clearly.
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Your greeting and closing were polite and appropriate.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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