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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts show the comparison between 1998 and 2008 for the percentage buying
food
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 and
goods
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 in three European
Countries
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.
This
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 text will be
sumarizing
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summarising
 the principal trends and aspects of the study. On one hand, all the
countries
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 increased their percentage of
food
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 and
goods
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 in supermarkets, the principal case where presented in the
Countries
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 A and C, showing an increase from 10% to 30% in
food
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 and 5% to 40% in
goods
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. It could
be
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have
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 happened because the supermarket
get in
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entered
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this
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 sector, with better prices than local markets.
On the other hand
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, Country B did not show a great change between those years, only with the
food
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 presented a little rise (22% to 27%)
but
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, but
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 it did not represent a huge change in the market.
This
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 suggests that people of Country B still get used to
go
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going
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 to local markets and prefer the
personalized
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personalised
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 attention of their owners. In conclusion, only
the
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apply
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Country B presented
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a
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an
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a
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 stable behaviour for shopping
of
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for
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food
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 and
goods
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 in
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the supermarket
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supermarket
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the supermarket
a supermarket
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.
In contrast
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,
Countries
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 A and C had a peak in the use of these
kind
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kinds
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 of stores because these cities could
grow up
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develop
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 their economies a lot, giving the
oportunity
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opportunity
of
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for
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 big supermarkets to enter
in
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apply
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its
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their
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 territories.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • increase
  • rise
  • lower
  • highest
  • trend
  • shopping habits
  • convenience
  • variety
  • food
  • goods
  • local markets
  • popular
  • significantly
  • suggests
  • shows
  • countries
  • European
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