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Band 4.5

Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training and others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing argument about whether professionals
such
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 as doctors and engineers should work in the
country
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 where they complete their training or whether they should be allowed to work and
moved
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be moved
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 to
foreign
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a foreign
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 land.
This
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 essay will discuss both views before presenting my own opinion. Examining the former
opinion
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opinion,
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 the primary argument that supporters put forward is
every
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that every
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country
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 needs their young minds as they have
major
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a major
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 impact
in
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on
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development
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the development
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 and growth of the
country
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.
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, these days many brilliant students are moving to the United States from India because of higher pay scales and better lifestyle
but
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, but
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 they are using their talent and knowledge for
other
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another
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country
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which
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, which
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 they could use for
own
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their own
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country
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.
On the other hand
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, some people believe that for personal growth and
better
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a better
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lifestyle
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lifestyle,
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 it is a good option to work and live in developed countries.
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,
well educated
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well-educated
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 citizens need excellent facilities with
better
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a better
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 environment and
higher
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a higher
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 salary.
Besides
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this
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, residents of any
country
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 deserve to decide on
place
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a place
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 to go after getting their higher engineering or medical degree.
Moreover
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, a
country
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 can get into a higher risk as
their
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its
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 development
get
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gets
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restrict
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restricted
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 because of
migration
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the migration
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 of skilled workers.
For instance
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, in
1990
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1990,
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 Canada invited many healthcare workers
for
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from
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 other countries
like
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, like
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 the United Kingdom.
To conclude
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 and offer my position, there are convincing arguments both for and against
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however
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; however
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, I strongly believe that people should be allowed to move and settle
in
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apply
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abroad because they get better opportunities in various sectors
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such
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, such
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 as career and quality of life.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to show clear connections between your ideas.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points.
content
The essay addresses both views well.
content
The conclusion summarizes your opinion clearly.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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