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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the
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 two maps illustrate the bookstore in the year and how it looks now.
there
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There
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 are many changes and
addition
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additions
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 in the new facilities
in
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In
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 2000,the friction
show
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showed
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 the largest portion.which
accupied
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occupied
 the
right
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 and left area of the store.
there
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There
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 were
section
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sections
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 of three
like
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, like
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cockery
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cookery
,hobbies and arts
that
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, that
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 arranged vertical rows.
the
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The
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right
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side
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 of
friction
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the friction
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 in front of
this
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 service desk ,new book and travel.
on
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On
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 the other
side
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, the entrance
on
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is on
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 the left
side
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.
in
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current
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the current
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 layout.
there
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There
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 were
non
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non-fiction
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fiction
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 portionslike art
hobbies
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, hobbies
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and
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, and
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cokery
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cookery
in
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, in
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 one line at the
right
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side
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 of
corner
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the corner
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.
but
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But
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 it will huge change
accur
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with
 the addition of tables that
available
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are available
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 for customers.
the
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The
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noteable
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notable
 changes
happens
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happen
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the
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in the
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 non
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section
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fiction
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fiction,
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 eliminate and added the cafe
at
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is added at
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 the bottom of the store.
despite
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Despite
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 the section of new books,travel ,entrance
and
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, and
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 service
book
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books
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 remain unchanged.
ultimately
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Ultimately
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the
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, the
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right
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side
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 of
fiction
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assign
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assigns
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 the
non
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non-fiction
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fiction
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.
these
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These
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bookstore
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bookstores
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 are now
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undergoing alot
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alot
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a lot
 of changes that describe
it
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them
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words right, side, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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